Ik heb een presentatie gemaakt en de docent zegt dat de grammatica heel erg bagger is. Zou iemand het even kunnen doorlezen? dan weet ik of het echt zo is of niet. Mijn docent maakt zelf ook erg veel grammaticale fouten
kopieer en plak de tekst hier anders?
Hello, my presentation is about the royal family of England. First I am going to tell you something about the family tree, I am not discussing the whole family tree because that would be way too much.
Let’s start with queen Elizabeth, I hope you all know her. She is the current queen of England. She is married to Philip Mountbatten and they have 4 children. I only included Charles because he is more important than his siblings. Charles was married to Princes Diana, also called Lady Di. They had 2 sons; William and Harry, again I only include William. After Diana died, he remarried Camilla, she is his current wife. William is married to Kate Middleton and they have one son; George Alexander Louis.
Philip Mountbatten is born at the 10th of june 1921 in Corfu, Greece. His full name is Prince Philip of Greece and Denmark, his parents are Prince Andrew of Greece and Denmark and Princess Alice of Battenberg. He is the husband of Queen Elizabeth, She is born at the 21st of april 1926 as Princess Elizabeth Alexandra Mary, her parents were George the sixth and former Queen Elizabeth Bowes-Lyon. They had 4 children: Charles, Anne, Andrew and Edward.
Prince Charles is born at November 14th , 1948 in London. His full name is Prince Charles Philip Arthur George. He and Diana got married in July 1981 and they filed for a divorce in 1996. Princess Diana was born at July the first 1961 as Diana Frances Spencer, and died in 1997 due to a lethal car accident because she was chased by the press. They had 2 children; William and Harry. In 2005 Charles remarried to Camilla Parker Bowles.
Prince William is born at the 21st of June, 1982 as William Arthur Philip Louis. He has one brother named Harry, when he was 15 his mom died.
Kate is born at the 9th of January 1982 as Catherine Elizabeth Middleton, she has two siblings; James and Philippa also called Pippa. Her parents were both flight attendants, but now they are running a successful store, named Party Pieces. They became millionaires.
I really adore Kate and William, they are the most perfect couple ever.
Kate met prince William in 2001, when they were both attending the university of St. Andrews. At that time, she was still in a relationship. At the end of 2001 Kate and William became friends and roommates. Since 2003 Kate and William are a couple. They were first publically seen in April 2004 during a ski trip in Klosters.
The media was harassing Kate so badly that she asked for royal protection, but because she still wasn’t married to William, they could not give her the protection she needed.
In April 2007 Prince William and Kate broke-up. The couple decided to break up during a holiday in the Swiss resort of Zermatt.
Middleton and her family attended the Concert for Diana at Wembley Stadium, where she and Prince William sat two rows apart. The couple were subsequently seen together in public on a number of occasions and news sources stated that they had reconciled
Prince William and Catherine Middleton became engaged in October 2010, in Kenya, during a 10-day trip to the Lewa Wildlife Conservancy to celebrate Prince William’s passing his RAF helicopter search and rescue course.
They announced their engagement on the 16th of November 2010
Prince William gave Middleton the engagement ring that had belonged to his mother, Diana, Princess of Wales. The couple married in Westminster Abbey on the 29th of April 2011
On the 3th of December 2012, St James’s Palace announced that the Duchess was pregnant with her first child. The announcement was made earlier in the pregnancy than is traditional as she had been admitted to the Hospital suffering from hyperemesis gravidarum and stayed there for three days. On January 14th 2013, St James’s Palace announced that the child was due to be born in July 2013, and that the condition of the Duchess was improving.
The Duchess was admitted to St Mary’s Hospital in London in the early stages of labour on the morning of the 22nd of July 2013, and gave birth to a baby boy, weighing 8 pounds 6 ounces. On the 24th of July 2013, Kensington Palace announced that the baby would be named George Alexander Louis.
And that’s is a summary about a very big and special family.
Bagger zou ik het sowieso niet noemen. Er zouden hier en daar wel een paar aanpassingen gemaakt mogen worden.
Zorg dat je wat meer woorden gebruikt zoals although, however etc.
En van became engaged kun je beter got engaged maken.
dat became engaged kwam van wiki. Dus ik dacht dat dat goed was, aangezien dat door engelsen wordt gemaakt xd
‘i really adore kate and william, they are the most perfect couple ever’
niet echt serieus presentatiemateriaal
Ik weet niet of het kan, maar ik vind het sowieso gewoon heel raar klinken.
Ik vind het ook niet bagger, maar sommige zinnen komen echt over alsof je het rechtstreeks gekopieerd hebt van wikipedia. Hier een paar dingen die je zou kunnen veranderen:
again I only include William >> “and again, today i will only include prince William”, dat is al een volledigere zin.
he remarried Camilla >> Hij is inderdaad opnieuw getrouwd, maar hij is niet opnieuw met Camilla getrouwd dus dit klopt niet. “He remarried. His second wife is called Camilla.” Zoiets zou je ervan kunnen maken.
van elke zin dat je zegt de geboortedatum vertelt kan je beter zeggen “He/She was born” in plaats van “is born”, de verleden tijd is hier een betere optie. De tegenwoordige tijd is erg wikipedia-achtig.
hyperemesis gravidarum >> het komt meer over als je eigen tekst als je dit toelicht/verandert/uitlegt
haha dat heb ik ook gwn weggelaten op mn presentatie, vond ht zelf ook
Bedankt! ik heb die hyperemis gravidarum ook uitgelegd inderdaad en dat van remarried, dat dacht ik al, maar ik was toch zo stom om het te zeggen.
Ik zou van ‘had’ gewoon ‘have’ maken, aangezien ze nog steeds twee zoons hebben, en niet hadden.
ja maar ik dacht omdat diana dood is, dus zij heeft geen zoons meer zeg maar. Miss have had?
Nee, ik zou ook have zeggen, William en Harry leven nog wel
Je docent maakt grammaticafouten?? Dat is echt slecht, sorry hoor!
Grammaticaal klopt het allemaal op zich wel hoor, alleen sommige zinnen komen erg “simpel” over terwijl andere zinnen weer heel “onnatuurlijk” overkomen. Misschien moet je sommige zinnen wat “vollediger” maken en andere iets meer spreektaal. Misschien komen sommige dingen inhoudelijk op schrift niet helemaal goed over, maar als je een presentatie houdt (eventueel met plaatjes erbij) dan snapt iedereen het denk ik wel. Succes!