Verbeteringen lyrics?

Hey! Ik schrijf soms zelf teksten en heb van de week een tekst geschreven. Ik wilde graag weten of er grammaticale fouten of spellingsfouten in zitten. En wat er misschien aan verbeterd kon worden.

Dit is de tekst:

[b]Something is hanging in the air, its taking over me
It makes me feel scared, it makes it harder to breathe
It feels like everybody’s running away from everything
But my feet won’t move
I keep on trying, but with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
To get back to what it used to be, when you we’re the one that loved me
They say all good things come to an end, they might be right
But I’m gonna take the risk… , For you the one that I miss

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say anything…

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

For you the one that I miss

We’re stuck in all the drama around us, trying to get out of it
But we’ve got no place to run to, no place were we’d fit in
And still I keep on trying with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
Cause baby you are worth all of the tears, they’ve made me strong
It’s getting easier for me to overcome
They say love is the most scary thing, they might be right
But we’re here now, and now is the time

For you the one that I miss

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say anything…

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

I’ve tried so many times… to turn into what I thought you’d like
But changing myself didn’t turn out as I’d hope for
Keep getting memories of how it was before

So… would you just listen?
Because

I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

And all of these words,
are for you, yeah you: the one that I miss [/b]

Something is hanging in the air, its taking over me
It makes me feel scared, it makes it harder to breathe
It feels like everybody’s running away from everything
But my feet won’t move
I keep on trying, but with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
To get back to what it used to be, when you we’re the one that loved me
They say all good things come to an end, they might be right
But I’m gonna take the risk… , For you the one that I miss

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say anything…

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

For you the one that I miss

We’re stuck in all the drama around us, trying to get out of it
But we’ve got no place to run to, no place were we’d fit in
And still I keep on trying with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
Cause baby you are worth all of the tears, they’ve made me strong
It’s getting easier for me to overcome
They say love is the most scary thing, they might be right
But we’re here now, and now is the time

For you the one that I miss

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say anything…

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

I’ve tried so many times… to turn into what I thought you’d like
But changing myself didn’t turn out as I’d hope for
Keep getting memories of how it was before

So… would you just listen?
Because

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

And all of these words,
are for you, yeah you: the one that I miss

Voor als ik er snel even overheen lees… :wink:

Up! En als je ideeën hebt of requests om over te schrijven, hoor ik het graag.

Up?

Something is hanging in the air, its taking over me
It makes me feel scared, it makes it harder to breathe
It feels like everybody’s running away from everything
But my feet won’t move
I keep on trying, but with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
To get back to what it used to be, when you we’re the one that loved me
They say all good things come to an end, they might be right
But I’m gonna take the risk… , For you are the one that I miss

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say anything…

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

For you the one that I miss

We’re stuck in all the drama around us, trying to get out of it
But we’ve got no place to run to, no place were we’d fit in
And still I keep on trying with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
Cause baby you are worth all of the tears, they’ve made me strong
It’s getting easier for me to overcome
They say love is the most scary thing, they might be right
But we’re here now, and now is the time

For you’re the one that I miss

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say anything…

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

I’ve tried so many times… to turn into what I thought you’d like
But changing myself didn’t turn out as I’d hope for
Keep getting memories of how it was before

So… would you just listen?
Because

I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

And all of these words,
are for you, yeah you: the one that I miss

Echt supermooi!

Dankjewel!

Mooi hoor!
En ik zie geen fouten meer.

Noproblemo! heb je toegevoegd als vriend. :slightly_smiling_face: echt leuk, ga je het zingen, of muziek er aan toevoegen? xox

it makes it harder to breathe zou ik veranderen in it’s making it harder to breathe.
dat klikt logischer vind ik…

vind m wel heel mooi!!
knap van je! (:

Something is hanging in the air, its taking over me
It makes me feel scared, it makes it harder to breathe
It feels like everybody’s running away from everything
But my feet won’t move
I keep on trying, but with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
To get back to what it used to be, when you were the one that loved me
They say all good things come to an end, they might be right
But I’m gonna take the risk… , For you the one that I miss

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say anything…

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

For you the one that I miss

We’re stuck in all the drama around us, trying to get out of it
But we’ve got no place to run to, no place were we’d fit in
And still I keep on trying with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
Cause baby you are worth all of the tears, they’ve made me strong
It’s getting easier for me to overcome
They say love is the most scary thing, they might be right
But we’re here now, and now is the time

For you the one that I miss

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say anything…

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

I’ve tried so many times… to turn into what I thought you’d like
But changing myself didn’t turn out as I’d hope for
Keep getting memories of how it was before

So… would you just listen?
Because

I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all of my fears…
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end up in this nightmare

And all of these words,
are for you, yeah you: the one that I miss

Ik weet ook niet of alle zinnen echt ‘goedlopend’ zijn :3

Sommige zinnen lopen niet lekker, maar voor de rest klopt het wel geloof ik.

Something is hanging in the air, its taking me over (over me omgedraaid)
It makes me feel scared, it makes it harder to breathe
It feels like everybody’s running away from everything
But my feet won’t move
I keep on trying, but with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
To get back to what it used to be, when you were the one who (er stond “that”) loved me
They say all good things come to an end, they might be right
But I’m gonna take the risk… , For you the one that I miss

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say a thing… (stond “anything”)

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all my fears… (tussen “all” en “my” stond “of” die weg;))
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end like this nightmare (stond: “up in”)

For you the one who I miss (stond: that)

We’re stuck in the drama all around us, trying to get out of it ('t woord "all"verplaatst)
But we’ve got no place to run to, no place were we’d fit in
And still I keep on trying with every word I sing

I’m willing to do anything, anything in the world
'Cause baby you are worth all my tears, they’ve made me stronger(“of the”)
It’s getting easier for me to conquer (vind persoonlijk conquer mooier dan “overcome”)
They say love is the scariest thing, they might be right ("most scary ")
But here we’re now, and now is the time (“here” verplaatst)

For you the one who I miss (“that”)

So would you just listen?
Just listen and don’t say a thing… (“anything”)

Cause I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all my fears… (tussen “all” en “my” stond “of” die weg;))
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end like this nightmare (stond: “up in”)

I’ve tried so many times… to become someone I thought you’d like (“turn into what”)
But changing myself didn’t turn out the way I hoped for (“as I’d hope for”)
I Keep on getting memories of how it used to be (I & on er tussen gezet) (“was before”)

So… would you just listen?
Because

I still feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you in my dreams
You took away all my fears… (tussen “all” en “my” stond “of” die weg;))
But in reality I don’t feel you, breathe you, kiss you, hold you…
Never thought our love would end like this nightmare (stond: “up in”)

And all of these words,
are for you, yeah you: the who that I miss (stond: “that”)

hopelijk heb je er wat aan!!:wink:

dit is eng, het beschrijft precies wat ik nu voel