Oproepje voor de Engelse wondere onder ons;help mij even (A)

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#1

Ik heb een Nederlandse tekst geschreven, die eigenlijk voor in het Engels bedoeld is. :’) Maar ik faal nogal in Engels, dus kunnen jullie even controleren? :grinning:

In het Nederlands is het dit:

Alles wat we doen in dit leven is proberen te ontsnappen uit de werkelijkheid.
Dromers dromen omdat ze in hun dromen niet over hun echte leven hoeven na te denken en meemaken wat ze wíllen meemaken.
Schrijvers schrijven omdat ze in hun verhalen kunnen zijn wie ze wíllen zijn.
Dansers dansen omdat ze zich dan gewichtloos en vrij als een vogel voelen, en niet opgesloten in het leven.
Muzikanten maken muziek omdat muziek alles om hen heen weg vaagt en hen pure schoonheid laat zien.
We zijn gek op liefde omdat liefde het enige is wat al onze problemen onbelangrijk doet lijken en ons écht gelukkig maakt.
Iedereen heeft een eigen manier om aan de werkelijkheid te ontsnappen. Dromen, schrijven, dansen en liefhebben zijn een paar manieren.
Voor veel van ons is Tumblr een manier.
Eigenlijk is god een verliezer. Niemand houdt echt van het leven wat hij creëerde, waarom zouden we anders zoveel manieren zoeken om de werkelijkheid, het leven, te vergeten?
Maar we kunnen het hem niet kwalijk nemen, alles wat God wilde was ons een kans geven om te bestaan, en om te kunnen dromen, schrijven, dansen, liefhebben enzovoort. Misschien zijn dat juist de dingen die het leven mooi maken en is dat alles ook de werkelijkheid.

In het Engels:
All we do in our life’s is trying to escape from reality.
Dreamers dream because in their dreams they don’t have to think about their real life and in their dreams they can let thing happen they really want to happen.
Writers write because in their stories they can be who they really want to be.
Dancers dance because then they feel weightless and free like a bird, and not locked up in life.
Musicians make music because music lets everything around them wipe away and shows them pure beauty.
We adore love because love is the only thing what makes our problems seem insignificant.
Everyone has their own way to escape from reality.
Dreaming, writing, dancing and loving are ways.
For many of us is Tumblr also a way.
Actually, God is a loser. Nobody really loves the life he created, why else would we try to find so many ways to forget the reality, the life?
But we can’t blame him, everything God wanted was to give us a chance to exist, to live, to be able to dreaming, writing, dancing, making music, loving etc.
Perhaps are those the things which make life beautiful, and maybe are all those things also reality.

Deze tekst a.u.b. niet jatten/kopiëren etc. :flushed:

Alvast bedankt voor jullie hulp! :grin:

#2

Ik ga eraan werken. Over een paar minuten staat het hier. : p

#3

@Morrison oke thanks :slightly_smiling_face:

#4

Volgens mij is die tekst helemaal niet zo heel slecht hoor (:

#5

All we do in our lives is trying to escape from reality.
Dreamers dream because in their dreams, they don’t have to think about their real life and in their dreams they can let things happen they really want to happen. (Misschien kan iemand anders even naar de structuur etcetera van deze zin kijken, want hij klopt volgens mij niet voor 100 procent, maar ik kom zou gauw niet op een verbetering)
Writers write because in their stories, they can be who they really want to be.
Dancers dance because that makes them feel weightless and free like a bird, and not locked up in life.
Musicians make music because music makes everything around them wipe away and shows them pure beauty.
We adore love because love is the only thing that makes our problems seem insignificant.
Everyone has their own way to escape from reality.
Dreaming, writing, dancing and loving are some of those ways.
For many of us, Tumblr is also a way.
Actually, God is a loser. Nobody really loves the life he created, why else would we try to find so many ways to forget reality, life? de “the”'s weglaten
But we can’t blame him, everything God wanted, was to give us a chance to exist, to live, to be able to dream, write, dance, create music, love etcetera.
Perhaps those are the things that make life beautiful, and maybe all those things are also reality.

De geplaatste komma’s zijn overigens slechts stylistisch.

#6

Nee, dat klopt. (:
Daarom heb ik 'm ook verbeterd; hier is tenminste moeite voor gedaan. Zo gauw ik zie dat het uit een vertaalmachine komt of iemand iets in een minuut heeft vertaald, doe ik het niet.

#7

All we do in our lives is trying to escape from reality.
Dreamers dream because in their dreams they don’t have to think about their real life and in their dreams they can let things happen they really want to happen.
Writers write because in their stories they can be who they really want to be.
Dancers dance because then they feel weightless and free like a bird, and not locked up in life.
Musicians make music because music wipes everything around them away(?) and shows them pure beauty.
We adore love because love is the only thing what makes our problems seem insignificant.
Everyone has their own way to escape from reality.
Dreaming, writing, dancing and loving are ways.
For many of us, Tumblr is also a way.
Actually, God is a loser. Nobody really loves the life he created, why else would we try to find so many ways to forget the reality, the life?
But we can’t blame him, everything God wanted was to give us a chance to exist, to live, to be able to dream, write, dance, make music, love etc.
Perhaps are those the things which make life beautiful, and maybe all those things are also reality.

Dit is wat ik ervan kon maken, er zit misschien wel meer in, of misschien heb ik nog wat fouten gemaakt

#8

Oh haha, ik was een beetje te laat, die van Morrison is beter dan die van mij! Uhm, ik weet niet of je dit op je Tumblr wil zetten, maar over dat stukje over God krijg je misschien wel wat nare reacties.

#9

Dankjewel jullie zijn heldinnen! :grinning:

#10

Geen probleem. (:

#11

Kan de zin zo wel; Actually, God is a loser. Nobody really loves the life he created, why else would we try to find so many ways to forget the reality, to forget life?
Want ik vind ‘to forget the reality, life?’ raar staan. :flushed:

#12

En toen keek niemand meer in dit topic? :stuck_out_tongue:

#13

Oh en kan dit;
Writers write because in their stories they can be who they really want to be and create impossible things.
:face_with_raised_eyebrow:

#14

Regel 1: het is toch Lifes?werkwoord is to live, maar zelfstandig naamwoord is gewoon life, toch?

#15

Ok, de tekst is nu;
All we do in our lives is trying to escape from reality.
Dreamers dream because in their dreams, they don’t have to think about their real life and in their dreams they can be who they really want to be. Writers write because in their stories they can let things happen they really want to happen and create impossible things.
Dancers dance because that makes them feel weightless and free like a bird, and not locked up in life.
Musicians make music because music makes everything around them wipe away and shows them pure beauty.
We adore love because love is the only thing that makes our problems seems insignificant.

Everyone has their own way to escape from reality. Dreaming, writing, dancing and loving are some of those ways.
(For many of us, Tumblr is also a way.)

And actually, God is a loser. Nobody really loves the life he created, why else would we try to find so many ways to forget the reality, to forget life? But we can’t blame Him, everything God wanted was to give us a chance to exist, to live, to be able to dream, write, dance, create music, love etc. Perhaps those are the things that make life beautiful, and maybe all those things are also reality.

#16

Klopt 'ie zoals hierboven?

#17

Je hebt gelijk. Het moet idd ‘Lifes’ zijn…

#18

volgens mij wel, ff snel doorgelezen maar waarom heb je him met hoofdletter?

#19

Het lijkt te kloppen alleen de in de laatste zin van de eerste paragraaf moet het wel seem zijn, dus zonder s. Het gaat namelijk om ‘the only thing’ en niet om ‘problems’, het moet dus enkelvoud zijn

#20

Ik ga verder met die laatste van Romancable:

All we do in our lives is trying to escape from reality.
Dreamers dream because in their dreams, they don’t have to think about their real life and in their dreams they can be who they really want to be. Writers write because in their stories they can let things happen they really want to happen and create impossible things.
Dancers dance because it makes them feel weightless and free like a bird, instead of locked up in life.
Musicians make music because music makes everything around them fade away and shows them true beauty.
We adore love because love is the only thing that makes our problems seem- insignificant.

Everyone has their own way to escape from reality. Dreaming, writing, dancing and to love somebody are some of those ways.
(For many of us, Tumblr is a way as well.)

And actually, God is a loser. Nobody really loves the life he created, why else would we try to find so many ways to forget - reality, to forget life? But we can’t blame Him, everything God wanted was to give us a chance to exist, to live, to be able to dream, write, dance, create music, love etc. Perhaps those are the things that make life beautiful, and maybe all those things are reality.

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Meer kan ik er ook niet van maken!
Dat laatste heb ik cursief gedaan, als je dat post zou ik dat ook doen. Op die manier leg je de nadruk op ‘aaaare’ zeg maar, dat je daar langer over doet, waardoor het duidelijk wordt dat je bedoeld dat dat júist de echte realiteit is (en volgens mij wilde je dat duidelijk maken, merk ik op in je nederlandse stukje).