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I’m still thinking about a book I read and I want to tell you about it. [color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][font=Helvetica Neue][font=Helvetica Neue]In the book a girl named Hayley has been raised by her grandparents since she was young. They are too strict and don’t show any love to Hayley. When Hayley does something wrong, she is not even sure what, they send her off to her other relatives in Ireland. To Hayley’s surprise, her family is much bigger than she thought. The children all play what they call “the game,” in a place called “the mythosphere.” I would have liked to join them. Since Hayley has met her family, she has been learning more about her own place in the world than she would have ever expected. Unfortunately the family isn’t one close group; uncle Joylon keeps them from living natural lives. [color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][font=Helvetica Neue][font=Helvetica Neue]It has a very nice plot! The first part isn’t very exciting, because the description of Hayley and her situation is very long (beter: tedious), but that makes it higher in contrastu[/u]. When you’ve finished the book you’ve got much to think about. I hadn’t thought this book would end so magically![color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][font=Helvetica Neue][font=Helvetica Neue]The influences of Greek mythology also made for a unique story that might even be considered as a tribute to themythologies that influence fantasy writing today. She weaves Greek myths in, but gives them modern clothing. [color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][font=Helvetica Neue][font=Helvetica Neue]My favourite character is Harmony, because she helps Hayley settle in and she organizes the game amazingly. She is so careful, I would have liked to be her niece![color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][font=Helvetica Neue][font=Helvetica Neue]Another nice thing; in The Game Hayley has to find a dragon scale. I think you like dragons so maybe you’ll like it (beter: i.p.v. it → the story)! [color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][font=Helvetica Neue][font=Helvetica Neue]For the most part the book was really nice. I wanted to quote a part of the end but I didn’t want to spoil anything. I took this small quote, because it was really touching. You learned that Hayley hadn’t known the warmth of family love before. And it’s nice she was welcomed in such a nice home. [color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][color=rgb(51, 51, 51)][font=Helvetica Neue][font=Helvetica Neue]I hope you enjoyed reading this letter![color=rgb(51, 51, 51)]
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Aiyo gurl,
Ik heb tekst vetgedrukt gemaakt die ik zou veranderen.
Succes ermee!
EDIT: ai hij kopieert een beetje vreemd. Nou ja, gewoon het dikgedrukte zou ik dus anders zeggen.
Heel erg bedankt! Super lief! <3
Met ‘that makes it higher in contrast’ bedoel ik de soort van tegenstelling tussen het langdradige eerste deel en het leuke plot. Hoe zou ik dit beter kunnen zeggen?
but that makes the contrast between the first and second part even bigger
Heel erg bedankt!!
Hoe kan ik dit topic nu verwijderen?
Ik heb hier en daar nog wat dingen aangepast
I’m still thinking about a book I’ve read and I would like to tell you about it. In the book a girl named Hayley has been raised by her grandparents since she was little. They are very strict and don’t show any love to Hayley. When Hayley does something wrong one day, she’s send off to her other relatives in Ireland. To Hayley’s surprise, her family is much bigger than she thought. The children all play what they call “the game,” in a place called “the mythosphere.” I would have liked to join them. Since Hayley has met her family, she has been learning more about her own place in the world more than she would have ever expected. Unfortunately the family isn’t very close; uncle Joylon keeps them from living nornmal lives. The book has a very nice plot! The first part isn’t very exciting, because the description of Hayley and her situation is very long (beter: tedious), but that makes the contrast between the first and second part of the book a lot bigger, which I liked very much.. You’ve got much to think about when you finish the book(Wie is you? De gene die je schrijft? Dit is namelijk erg Nederlands volgens mij zeg anders “When you will read this book you will see that there is a lot for you to think about”). I hadn’t thought this book would end so magically!The influences of Greek mythology]also made for a unique story that might even be considered as a tribute to the mythologies that influence fantasy writing today. She(wie is zij? Als het de schrijfster is zeg dan “writer”) weaves Greek myths in, but gives it a modern twist by giving them modern clothing. My favourite character is Harmony, because she helps Hayley settle in and she organizes the game amazingly. She is so careful, I would have liked to be her niece!Another nice thing; in The Game, Hayley has to find a dragon scale. I think you like dragons so maybe you’ll like it (beter: i.p.v. it → the story)! For the most part the book was really nice. I wanted to quote a part of the end but I didn’t want to spoil anything. I took this small quote, because it was really touching. You learned that Hayley hadn’t known the warmth of family love before. And it’s nice she was welcomed in such a nice home. I hope you enjoyed reading this letter
Aiyo gurl,(Als dit voor school is zou ik dit even veranderen)
Nog een paar dingetjes:
- Was kan je niet afkorten en voltooid deelwoord send is sent. Dus: “When Hayley does something wrong one day, she was sent…”
- “Since Hayley has met her family, she has been learning…”. Nu staat er twee keer has, ik zou 1 van de 2 weghalen en vervangen door de past simple ("(ever) since Hayley met her family, she has been…" of “(ever) since Hayley has met her family, she learned…”). Het zelfde geld voor “…more than she would have ever expected”. Ik zou die ook vervangen door past simple, bekt wat beter.
- “and it’s nice she was welcomed in such a nice home.” Het is “and it’s nice that she…”.