Engels formele brief, HELP!!

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#1

İk heb een formele brief geschreven in het Engels, maar ik ben barslecht in het vak. Dus ik vroeg het ma af, of iemand mij kon helpen?

İs het goed vertaalt? En zoniet, wat moet er staan?

Ps: İk moet ook zeggen dat ik in havo4 zit, maar hoe the fuck moet je dat zeggen? :frowning_face:…

Owja, dit is voor een cijfer en moet het morgen al inleveren!

Mijn brief:

İ have seen an advertisement in the ‘Daily Telegraph’ and i diceded to write a letter to you. My English is not so good. Because of that i want to stay in England for a while and development me English to the top.

The facilities that your school is giving affected me deeply. My biggest problem is that İ can’t speak and write of English language. İ want to get rid of all my problems.

İt’s not a problem for me to go on a Summer School during the holiday, because the control of the language is much more important for me than the holiday.

İ want to know something more about the Summer School so i want to ask you some questions.
How much cost the Summer School? İs the cultural activities included the schoolprice? What is the average age of the students? How many students are in a group? My personal preference is al small group with a few students, because İ think that the students get more personal attention than.

#2

[size=2]Ik zou hem zo doen. Sorry als er nog eventuele fout in zitten. ;p

`I have seen an advertisement in the ‘Daily Telegraph’ and I decided to write you a letter. My English is not very good. Because of that reason I’d like to stay in England for a while and expand my knowledge of the English language.

The facilities your school offers seem very fitting for me. My biggest problem is the fact that I can’t speak nor write English properly. I would like to get rid of these problems very badly.

It’s not an issue for me to go on a Summer School during the holidays, because of my priorities. Working on my English is right now more important to me than enjoying my holiday.

I would like to know some more facts about the Summer School so I want to ask you some questions.
How much is the Summer School? Are the cultural activities included to this price? What is the average age of the students? How many students sign up for the Summer school and how many students are put in one particular group? My personal preference would be a small group with just a few students, because I think students get more personal attention in a small group than they would get in a bigger group. `

#3

Dan zal ik bovenstaande verbeteren.

I saw an advertisement in the Daily Telegraph and decided to write you a letter. My English is not very well. Because of that reason I’d like to stay in England for a while and gain knowledge of the English language.

The facilities your school offers seem to fit my needs. My biggest problem is the fact that I can’t speak nor write English properly and I’d like to get rid of that.

It’s not an issue for me to go on summer school during the holidays. Working on my English is more important to me right now than enjoying my holiday.

I’d like to know some more facts about summer school and therefore I want to ask you some questions.
What is the price of summer school? Are the cultural activities included included? What is the average age of the students? How many students sign up for summer school and how many students are put in one group? My personal preference would be a small group with just a few students, because I think students get more individual attention in a small group than they would get in a larger group.

#4

I saw an advertisement in the Daily Telegraph and decided to write you a letter. My English is not very well. Because of that reason I’d I would like to stay in England for a while and gain knowledge of the English language. My English is not very good and because of that I would like to stay in England for a while to improve my English skills.

The facilities your school offers seem to fit my needs. My biggest problem is the fact that I can’t cannot speak nor write English properly and I’d like to get rid of that. (Dit is een beetje raar, alsof je het echt vreselijk vindt en er zo snel mogelijk vanaf moet.) and that is why I would like to learn this language.

It’s It is not an issue for me to go on to summer school during the holidays. Working Improving on my English is more important to me right now than enjoying my holiday.

I’d I would like to know some more facts about summer school and therefore I want to ask you some questions. What is the price of summer school? Are the cultural activities included included in the schoolcosts? What is the average age of the students? How many students sign up for summer school and how many students are put in one group? My personal preference would be a small group with just a few students, because I think students get more individual attention in a small group than they would get in a larger group.

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En dan verbeter ik deze haha. Je moet bij formele brieven altijd woorden volledig schrijven, dus geen would’ve I’ve it’s I’d. (heb ik geleerd)

#5

Afkorten is ook formeel steeds meer geaccepteerd, maar beide mogen. Verder is her English not very well.

#6

Ik vind het persoonlijk wat netter staan. En dat is het eigenlijk ook.

#7

Maar hoe krijg je het voor elkaar om zo engels te spreken in H5 :’)

#8

Wat?

#9

H4, correctie.

İk moet ook zeggen dat ik in havo4 zit, maar hoe the fuck moet je dat zeggen? :frowning_face:

Dit is echt groep 8 niveau hoe zij typt.

#10

:grinning:

#11

Oh zo ja. Dat vraag ik me ook sterk af. xd

#12

Dit is vertaalmachine vertaling heb ik het idee :wink: ze vraagt ook al ‘is het goed vertaaltd’? niet bepaald nee. Een buitenlandcursus engels zoals je in je brief schrijft zou best iets voor je zijn!

#13

Juust’em.

Ik zal maar eens aftrappen met het feit dat ik een vreselijke hekel heb aan mensen die andere mensen aanspreken op hun niveau, terwijl zij zelf ook nog een behoorlijk aantal fouten maken, niet alleen wat betreft taalgebruik, maar ook qua inhoud. TS deed het namelijk WEL goed, door te zeggen “My english is not so good”. My English is not so well is dus gewoon hartstikke fout! Wat je moet zeggen is: I don’t speak English so well of my English is not so good. Maar goed, dat was wel weer genoeg grammatica les voor vandaag. Jezelf voor de kop slaan is toegestaan. :’) Kleineer mensen alsjeblieft niet en laat hen in hun waarde - iedereen doet zijn best en niemand is perfect.

Om mijn grootste ergernis te kunnen uiten, heb ik ook de aangepaste brief veranderd.

I am writing to you, because I saw your advertisement in the Daily Telegraph of (e.g. 15 September last). I do not speak English very well and, in order to improve my English communication skills, I would like to go to school in England for a while,

The facilities your school offers seem to fit my needs. Dit zou ik persoonlijk allemaal skippen, omdat je het al eens vermeld hebt. Vertel wat meer over waarom deze school in het bijzonder jou zo aanspreekt.

It is not an issue for me to go to summer school during the holidays. Improving my English skills is more important to me right now than going on holiday.

However, the are still a few things not completely clear to me and that is why I would like to ask you some questions. First of all I would like to know the price of summer school? Are the cultural activities included in the schoolcosts? What is the average age of the students? How many students sign up for summer school and how many students are put in one group? My personal preference would be a small group with just a few students, because I think students get more individual attention in a small group than they would get in a larger group. TIP VOOR DIT HELE DEEL: zorg dat er samenhang is tussen de vragen. Dit kan bv door gebruik van signaal woorden (first of all, moreover, furthermore).

I think you in advance for the trouble to be taken.

Yours (sincerely/faithfully),

Name.

#14

@hierboven: I don’t speak English so well?
Dat klinkt niet echt juist. Dan is het very well.

#15

So well, too well, gewoon well, very well, wat jij wil.